Author Topic: I have an idea (Read 7656 times)

dak · « **on:** September 18, 2008, 04:15:18 PM »

This idea pop out when i try to get sleep, so i write it down and see what your response

Let see

Uhm Lum lead Mayuko to graveyard to visit Ataru's grave. Then she met Ryuunosuke when see she visit her father' grave. Then they met Ten when he having a date with Mako. See how strong Ryuunosuke and Mako are, Mayuko decide that see will become a boy hunter just like her father.

What do you think?

gatulon · « **Reply #1 on:** September 18, 2008, 11:55:57 PM »

mmmh....

so hard to develop !!

We know.... better, I KNOW Mayuka as just a sweet child: we've to "build" her character from the scratch talking about her as an unchained teenager.

But, over all, we'd have to detail her so much: we haven't any design of Mayuka as teenager !

SandStorm · « **Reply #2 on:** September 19, 2008, 05:05:31 AM »

just make her like lum with few changes

dak · « **Reply #3 on:** September 19, 2008, 08:44:12 AM »

make her like Lum and the history repeat the same as UY?

SandStorm · « **Reply #4 on:** September 19, 2008, 01:22:03 PM »

i mean visually.

dak · « **Reply #5 on:** September 19, 2008, 03:55:35 PM »

Of course Mayuka will look like Lum.
I hate to imagine her look like Ataru

SandStorm · « **Reply #6 on:** September 19, 2008, 07:39:48 PM »

well, mayuka with ataru grin

dak · « **Reply #7 on:** September 20, 2008, 03:37:24 AM »

ok i can imagine that, not bad at all, or i have to say it kind of cute

dak · « **Reply #8 on:** September 29, 2008, 11:49:50 AM »

i working on the first chapter of story, it will come soon, or so i though

cata · « **Reply #9 on:** September 29, 2008, 10:20:49 PM »

Lum would teach Maykua to be like her without the violent electrifying stuff. Ataru would teach her to protect herself from the boys. The exact opposite of Ataru. That way it would be ironic and extremely funny.

lilwiz · « **Reply #10 on:** September 30, 2008, 05:57:17 AM »

Quote from: cata on September 29, 2008, 10:20:49 PM

Lum would teach Maykua to be like her without the violent electrifying stuff. Ataru would teach her to protect herself from the boys. The exact opposite of Ataru. That way it would be ironic and extremely funny.

lol ataru is just the kind of person who would be super overprotective of Maykua

dak · « **Reply #11 on:** September 30, 2008, 10:20:13 AM »

Quote from: cata on September 29, 2008, 10:20:49 PM

Ataru would teach her to protect herself from the boys.

That is another case. In my case, Mayuka is a fatherless child.

SandStorm · « **Reply #12 on:** September 30, 2008, 08:40:27 PM »

i don't think so.
ataru shall be overprotective to mayuka...
-> she is her kid
-> she is a girl.

cata · « **Reply #13 on:** September 30, 2008, 09:30:42 PM »

Dak: ATARU IS IMMORTAL just like any other character of UY.

dak · « **Reply #14 on:** October 01, 2008, 05:20:14 AM »

i know all of that, but it just the beginning of story.

dak · « **Reply #15 on:** October 03, 2008, 12:05:40 PM »

ok here is the open of first chapter what do you think?
   A cloudy day, look like it going to rain. Everyone go as fast as they to the places they want to reach before it rain. But there are two person still walking slowly. A little girl and a beautiful woman. The little girl is about eight or nine years old and kind of playful, she always run first, look at all the building and people with curious and joyful eyes. After looking at the fastfood stand for a while, she turn back and call the woman: Mother, i'm tired. When will we reach that place?
   Her mother walk to her at her same speed, give her child a small smile and say: We will reach there soon, dear.
   The girl, tired voice: I'm thirsty
   Her mother, calm voice: I told you not to run, didn't i?
   The girl: But you can't expect me to live with just a cup of juice even if i didn't run.
   Her mother, sigh: are you try to persuade me to buy you another juice?
   The girl, smile silly: You got me.
   Her mothe, look at her and give her a small smile: Your smile is just like father's.
   The girl, surprised voice: really? really, mother? my smile is just like father's?
   Her mother look at her with sad eyes and nod. The girl yell cheerfully and started to run again. She look very happy.
   After about half hour, those two now are standing before a big gate. The girl look up and cling to her mother, she said with scared voice: Mother, are you sure father is here? This place look so creepy!
   Rub her child's head lightly, she lead her child in. On the stone board located outside the door written: Tomobiki Center Graveyard.


   They walk slowly, past though some grave stones before stop before one. The woman look at her child and say with sad voice: Mayuka, here is place where your father rested. Come and pray for him, dear.
   Mayuka walk slowly toward the stone and stop before it. On the stone written:
Here lie our true hero, the one who sacrifice his life for everyone's life.
      ATARU MOROBOSHI
   Born 4/13/1980 Death 9/11/2008
Hope his soul shall rest in peace.

sr for bad writing skill

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