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LIFE (TO BREATH THE STARS)
« on: March 11, 2008, 09:50:05 PM »
'Benten, YOU ARE LIFE !! Don't you wanna breath the stars tonight ?'

URUSEI YATSURA, THE UNOFFICIAL 10TH SEASON
LIFE (TO BREATH THE STARS) - STAND ALONE CHAPTER !!


Tomobiki ' First day of springtime

Clear summer night.
Moon.
Stars.
SPEED !
MOTORWAY !!
POWER !!!
WIND ON THE HAIRS !!!
Benten is riding her bike.
One another biker arrive next to her.

[Benten, without casque, talking to a guy in a moto next to her] WHO ARE YOU ?
[Guy, same situation] I AM WIND AND DUST !!! COME ON CATCH ME !!!

They're riding like the wind !!
So much movements on the street !!
Dangerous movements.

[Benten, same situation, rather angry] All right, let's play loud: OVERPOWER ON !!

Great accelleration !!
Speedometer is going out of scale !!

[Guy, same situaiton] GOOOOOOOOOOD !!! OVERPOWER ON !!!

180 khm.............210 khm..............230 khm...............235 khm............noone wanna give up !!!

THE WAY AHEAD IS CLOSED !!!

238 Khm..................... .240 khm..................... ....245 kmh..........

AN INCOMING OBSTACLE !!!

250 kmh............260 kmh

THEY'RE RIDING SIDE BY SIDE !!!

....262 kmh..............266 kmh

A GREAT BREAK !!!
TYRES ARE GREATINGS AND SUFFERING !!!
ACRID SMELL OF BURNIED GUM !!!

......BOTH HAS STOPPED JUST IN TIME !!!

........................ ........................ ...........BREATHING !!

The guy is next to her.
So young.
So cute.
Black eyes and (short) hairs too.
He's wearing a red motobiker dress.

[Benten, screaming out of her soul] ARE YOU CRAZY ?!? DID YOU WANTED TO KILL ME ??
[Guy, with a clear laught] AH AH AH !! I KNEW THAT YOU'D BREAKED JUST IN TIME !!!
[Benten, screaming out of her soul] YOU'RE NOT CRAZY, YOU'RE STUPID !!! HOW COULD YOU KNOW WHAT THAT I WANT TO DO ?!?

[Guy, with clear voice now] BECAUSE YOU ARE LIFE !!!

[Benten, now surprised] What ?
[Guy, even with clear voice] Yeah: YOU ARE LIFE !!! [Now wondering, same voice] What's your name ?
[Benten, still surprised] ....ehr......Benten..... ..Just call me Benten........and you ?
[Guy, with clear voice] I AM KANEDA AND I AM WIND AND DUST !!!! And I want also your cellphone number.
[Benten, now with sadic voice and smile] Why I would have to give it to you ?!?

[Kaneda, even with clear voice] BECAUSE YOU ARE LIFE !!!

[Benten, now surprised]......<<Life>> ?!?
...
...
...
Dark silent night.
Deep sleep.
CELLPHONE RINGING !!!

[Benten, waking up from the bed] YAAAAAAAAAAAAWN !!! ..... Hell' ??
[Kaneda, talking on the cellphone, scared] BENTEN, I NEED YOUR HELP !!! HURRY !!!
[Benten, now angry] KANEDA !!! WHAT THE FOOL OF JOKE !!! DO YOU KNOW WHAT TIME IS IT ??
[Kaneda, same situation] THIS IS NOT A JOKE !!! I REALLY NEED YOU !!! HURRY !!! I AM INTO A TERRIBLE TROUBLE !!!
[Benten, now scared too]....and what I have to do ?!?
...
...
A great run in motobike.
A strange meeting point.
IN THE CENTER OF A FAR, HIGH IRON BRIDGE !!!
Kaneda is already there.

[Benten, rather angry] KANEDA, WHAT THE...
[Kaneda, worried] I'LL EXPLAIN YOU LATER !!! JUST COME WITH ME !!! [and started to run]
[Benten, running and worried too] WHAT'S GOING ON ?!?
[Kaneda, worried] LOOK OVER THERE !!!

A MAN IS ON THE TOP OF THE BRIDGE !!
Alone.
.....with his loneliness.......

He's watching the river under the bridge.....
.......he's not scared of the emptiness............... .
...........the night has great, soft, warm hands to be huged...

Kaneda is now wearing a bungy-jumping breeching !!

[Kaneda, screaming to Benten] YOU HAVE TO SECURE THIS GUIDELINE SOMEWHERE ON THE BRIDGE AND TO HOLD IT WITH ALL YOUR STRENGHT !! AND ALSO TO TREAT YOURSELF AS A COUNTERBALANCE WITH IT IF WOULD HAVE TO NEED !!!
[Benten, screaming too] WHY I WOULD HAVE TO DO THIS ONE ?!?

[Kaneda, watching and smiling to her, with clear voice] BECAUSE YOU ARE LIFE !!!

...............just one step....
....................a muscle is flexing...
........................ .AND THE MAN IS NOW ON THE EMPTINESS !!!!

A GREAT SCREAM !!!
A LARGE JUMP !!!
KANEDA IS NOW IN THE EMPTINESS TOO !!!
JUST ONE CHANCE !!!!
.
..
...
....
.....
......
........
.........
..........A SUDDEN HUG !!!
...
...
... CATCHED !!!
...
... JUST IN TIME !!!

On the bridge Benten is screaming loudly, due to pain and to the effort !!
BUT THE MAN NOW IS SAFE !!!

A long, grueling climbing...
.... and Kaneda and the man are now on the bridge.
The man is swooned.

[Benten, breathing so much] W.. [anf anf].....who is that ?
[Kaneda, breathing so much too] .....MY BROTHER !! ....[still breathing louldy, with clear voice] YOU KNOW ?!? [anf] WHO SAVE [anf] ONE LIFE [anf] SAVE [anf] THE WORLD !!!
[Benten, now surprised] Really ?!?
[Kaneda, with touched voice] I....[anf]..I was [anf] trusting [anf] on you [anf] from [anf] the beginning.
[Benten, still surprised] Really ? ...[anf].....why ?

[Kaneda, same voice] BECAUSE YOU ARE LIFE !!!
...
...
...
Another summer night.
Clear.
Stars on the sky.
Light breeze.

Pebbles.
... throwed on the glass of a window...
... light noise....
A light is set on.

[Benten, talking from the window] Kaneda, what are you doing here at this hour ?
[Kaneda, talking from the ground] BENTEN, DON'T YOU WANT TO BREATH THE STARS TONIGHT ?!?
[Benten, surprised] What ?!? <<TO BREATH THE STARS>> ?!?
...
...
A long ride on the motobike.
(This time with the casque).
Both on the same moto.
Huged.
An abandoned place.
A strange palace.
An old house of glasses.
Kaneda smash the door.
Felt with an open sound.

[Benten, watching all the rooms, suspicious] What a rubbish place...
[Kaneda, with clear voice] You have to come with me on the upstair floor...

A dark room.
Glasses everywhere.
Images of theirselfes echoing everywhere
...
A SUDDEN JUMP...
KANEDA BROKE AN HATCH FROM THE CEILING...
....
AND THE SKY IS NOW ENTERED INSIDE THE ROOM !!!
...
STARS !
EVERYWHERE !!
ON THE CEILING !!
ON THE FLOOR !!
ON THE WALLS !!!
ON THE AIR !!!

ON THEIR DRESS !!
ON THEIR HAIRS !!!
ON THEIR SKIN !!!

[Benten, surprised at the top, looking all around and herself] That.........that's incredibile.......imposs ible.. [stratching the arms and looking at them and at the hands]THE STARS ARE NOW REALLY ON ME !!!! ON  YOU !!!.....it seems that........that I can touch the stars !!! It seems really that I can breath them !!!
[Kaneda, with sweet voice, looking into her eyes] ... and it seems to be a part of the infinity too...

So close.
Fingers are twisting
... much close...
...
...
....
KISSES !!!!
HUGS !!!
HANDS CARESSINGS !!!
FALLING DRESS !!!
...
....
....
....
....
Laying now side by side.
...
...
[Kaneda, holding her hand] Just one more moment.....
[Benten, now her black long hairs are unknitted]... why ?
[Kaneda, with sweet voice] DON'T YOU WANT TO FEEL THE MOON ?!?
[Benten, surprised].....<<to feel the Moon>> ?!?
....
Just few minutes..
...
and
...
...
...
... THE MOON ARISES ON HER SKIN, ON HER BODY, WITH MILLIONS OF STARS ALL AROUND !!

[Benten, still laying, top surprised] Oh my G..............how can it possible ?!?
[Kaneda, still laying too, sweetly] I WANT THOUSAND MOONS TO CARESS YOU !!!
...
...
Once more...
... body shared...
....hearts melted....
.... one......
...
[Kaneda, sweetly] Now I know why you were wearing that chain....
[Benten, sweetly, too] Really ?!? So explain it to me
[Kaneda, same voice] It was made to chain me and you.......
....
....
Another beautiful summer day.
Sun and warm.
The nature is at its top.
Kaneda and Benten are together.
Riding motobike again.
Both.
Happyness.
Complicities.
Desire.

[Benten, with fake scared voice] YOU'RE DRIVING TOO CRAZY !!! SLOW !!! SLOW !!!
[Kaneda, excited] IMPOSSIBLE !!! I  AM WIND AND DUST !!! [and laughted]
....
....
A lawn so far....
Nobody around them.
Benten is sit with her back abutted on a tree and hold the head of Kaneda on her knees.

[Kaneda, watching her on the eyes] Benten, please, let me sip once again from the cup of the life.
[Benten, caressing his black hairs]... and who's holding that cup ?!?
[Kaneda, same situation, sweet voice] You !!! You're holding that cup and the cup is full of you........BECAUSE YOU ARE LIFE !!!
..
......
Suddenly....
....
Strange headhache
Fabilebess
The clouds are now circling round and arount...
So fast....
More fast....
TOO MUCH FAST......
NOW KANEDA IS SWOON !!!

[Benten, much scared, shaking him] Ehi........ehi.........K aneda !! No jokes ! ...Kaneda.......KANEDA !! KANEDAAAAAAAAAA !!! WHAT'S GOING ON ?!? HOW ARE YOU ?!? KANEDAAAA !! ARE YOU HEARING ME ?!? HOW DO YOU FEEL ?!? KANEDAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA !!
...
...
A naked room
An iron bed
On an hospital
Kaneda is on a bed
So feeble
Benten is next to him.

[Benten, crying] STUPID !!! STUPID !!! STUPID !!! WHY YOU'VE NEVER SAIED NOTHING TO ME ?!?
[Kaneda, on the bed, with feeble voice] Because.....I wanted.... to live.....
[Benten, still crying] HOW LONG YOU WERE SUFFERING FOR THIS TUMOR ?!?
[Kaneda, same situation] So long...
[Benten, now scared].......and.......and how much time it rest to live ?!?
[Kaneda, same situation] I...would.... have...to....die.......t he day.......that.... I've met you !!!
[Benten, same situation] BUT YOU COULD HEAL ?!?
[Kaneda, same situation] M....maybe........with.. ..a...difficult.....oper ation.....
[Benten, crying] STUPID !!! STUPID !!! STUPID !!! WHY YOU HAVN'T ALREADY DID ?!?
[Kaneda, same situation] Because.......it........ cost.......too much..........for me....and...I havn't.....enough....money....
[Benten, crying] STUPIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIID !!!
...
...
...
[Benten, talking on the cellphone] Oyuky, I need a great help from you.....
...
...
...
Another hospital.
Kaneda is now into another bed.
Some nurser are now around him.
Anesthesia is now flowing on him.

[Kaneda, on the bed, with feeble voice] Thank you Benten.......thank you.......for......every thing......
[Benten, crying] STUPID !!! STUPID !!! STUPID !!! DON'T SPEAK IN THIS WAY !!! YOU CAN HEAL !!! YOU ARE STILL IN TIME TO HEAL !!!
[Kaneda, same situation] I...am....happy....
[Benten, same situation] REALLY ?!?
[Kaneda, same situation] I...had....met....you... ...and....YOU....ARE.... ..LIFE !!!
[Benten, crying] YOU CAN HEAL !!! YOU CAN HEAL !!! YOU ARE STILL IN TIME TO HEAL !!! [and huged him]
...
...
[Mendo, on the corridor talking to prof. Oynata] Prof. Oynata, we're here again trusting on you.
[Prof. Oynata, next to him] I have to say: the operation will be so much difficult !!! The guy is too feeble !!!
...
...
Late in the evening.
The operation have started.
Benten is in front of the door of the room where Kaneda is operated.
Wait.
Long wait.
Any news.
Friends.
Lots of friends around her.

Long wait

[Lamú, with gentle voice] You'd have to eat somethin.
[Benten, with cold voice] I'm not angry.

Long wait.

[Oyuky, with gentle voice] Is bettere to have a little relax.
[Benten, with cold voice] I don't wanna sleep.
...
Long wait.
...
...
Starvation.
...
....
PRAYERS !!
...
...
Sleep...
....
....
Morning....
Strange awaking
Headhache
...
...
Suddenly...
...
One second..
...
AND THE DOOR SLIDE !!!

[Benten, taking prof. Oynata on his green coat] WHAT THE NEWS ?!? HOW IS HE ?!?HE'S STILL ALIVE ?!? HE'S STILL ALIVE ?!?
[Prof. Oynata, with grave voice] No.
[Benten, top scared, with thrembling voice] OH......OH MY GOD ?!? HE'S DIED ?!?
[Prof. Oynata, with grave voice] No.
[Benten, screaming with the top ot her strength, shaking prof. Oynata on his green coat] WHAT THE FOOL OF JOKE !!! I'M NOT HERE JUST TO PLAY !!! I WANNA KNOW HOW IS HE !!!
[Prof. Oynata, shaked, with trembling voice] Pl......please......let. ......let me explain.

Ataru and Mendo are now grabbing her.

[Ran, with gentle voice] Please, Benten, let him explain. [So Ataru and Mendo let her free]

[Prof. Oynata, now breathing, with grave voice] Well......tecnically.... ...the operation was a success.....but.....

[Benten, now scared] <<BUT>> ?!?
[Prof. Oynata, still breathing, with grave voice] I've saied to you.....it was too feeble......we've tried to reanimate him for several times and.......in the end......

[Benten, top scared, rather crying] HE'S DIED ?!? [now without breathing]
....
....
....
....
...
[Prof. Oynata, with grave voice] I'm sorry..........HE'S FELT INTO AN IRREVERSIBLE COMA !
[Benten, crying with all of her strenght] NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO !!! [and felt dropped on her knees]

[Lamú, crying, strictly huged to Ataru] Darling is.............is terribile.............is terrible !!!
[Ataru, huging strictly Lamú, talking to himself] LUCKY !!! WE HAVE BEEN LUCKY !!! JUST ONE YEAR AGO...... WE HAVE BEEN LUCKY !!! THANKS GODNESS  !!! WE HAVE BEEN LUCKY !!!

[Ran, huging Benten, crying] Please, Benten: be strong !!! be strong !!! BE STRONG !!

[Oyuky, huged to Mendo, crying] THAT'S UNRIGHT !!! THAT'S REALLY UNRIGHT !!
[Mendo, huging strictly Oyuky, talking to himself] THE THINGS THAT DON'T KILL MAKE US STRANGERS !!!

[Prof. Oynata, even with grave voice] Just some second before the operation he left this page to me, saying that I would have to give to you in case of something happened

Benten, reading the page, felt down to the floor, swooned.

Now everyones were around her.

Ataru took the page and red the text.

Only two words.
..
..
..
..
..
..
<<LIVE, LIFE>>




..... CHOOSE LIFE !!!
« Last Edit: January 27, 2009, 11:30:22 AM by Lum-chan »

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Re: LIFE (TO BREATH THE STARS)
« Reply #1 on: March 12, 2008, 02:07:40 AM »
Awesome! I always found it hard to think up a non ataru/lum story. And there's even some interpretation in the story on life ^_^ 


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Re: LIFE (TO BREATH THE STARS)
« Reply #2 on: March 12, 2008, 02:57:59 PM »
That was wonderful.

Never thought I'd read something like this. Trully amazing. ^O^
Signatured postponed until I cba to make a new one. x.x

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Re: LIFE (TO BREATH THE STARS)
« Reply #3 on: March 12, 2008, 06:36:12 PM »
Thank you, thank you  _/-\o_

I' "seriously" thinking that I'm doing the wrong work   ;D

Back to the tale, it was a double challange for me:

1) how to make Benten felt in love with someone ?!? her character is so powerful and so full of charisma: it wasn't easy at all;
2) over all, HOW TO WRITE A LOVE STORY WITHOUT USING THE WORD "LOVE" ?!?

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Re: LIFE (TO BREATH THE STARS)
« Reply #4 on: March 12, 2008, 11:40:17 PM »
is that what "you are life" was supposed to me? that he loved her or something?


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Re: LIFE (TO BREATH THE STARS)
« Reply #5 on: March 13, 2008, 12:02:52 AM »
FULL CENTER  _/-\o_

In my thought the boy loves both the girl and the life (because is gona die): with Benten he fInd both !!

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Re: LIFE (TO BREATH THE STARS)
« Reply #6 on: March 13, 2008, 01:29:09 AM »
I've never been one for life affirming stories like this, personally. They kinda make me nauseous.
Excuse me, have you seen my mind? I seem to have misplaced it...

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Re: LIFE (TO BREATH THE STARS)
« Reply #7 on: March 13, 2008, 02:00:17 AM »
I'll admit it's not as good as some of your other chapters but the fact you were able to make a chapter that revolves around another character is enough to keep me impressed ^_^


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Re: LIFE (TO BREATH THE STARS)
« Reply #8 on: October 02, 2008, 06:42:39 AM »
hey, was this KANEDA biker-guy a reference to "AKIRA"?

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Re: LIFE (TO BREATH THE STARS)
« Reply #9 on: October 02, 2008, 08:33:49 PM »
 yeah  ;D

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Re: LIFE (TO BREATH THE STARS)
« Reply #10 on: April 27, 2011, 12:00:05 AM »
yeah  ;D
What did you mean when Mendou said the things that kill us make us strangers?

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Re: LIFE (TO BREATH THE STARS)
« Reply #11 on: April 27, 2011, 12:34:31 AM »
OOPS !!!

WHAT A MISTAKE !!!

I meant "WHAT DOESN'T KILL MAKE US FOREIGNS" !!

In this point of my timeline Kaneda is nor dead nor alive: nobody knows what has become !!!

NOW IS JUST "CONFORTABLY NUMB": he doesn't feel nor pain nor the love of Benten.

here you are what I mean with that phrase: NOBODY CAN UNDERSTAND HIS LANGUAGE OR HIS FEELINGS !!!


You should read "LIVING IN A BOX" to know the sequel of the love story between Benten and Kaneda (but take a look also at "hate me, eat me": there is an important.... "revelation").

PS: I'm really glad that you like my tales !!

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Re: LIFE (TO BREATH THE STARS)
« Reply #12 on: April 27, 2011, 09:42:33 AM »
OOPS !!!

WHAT A MISTAKE !!!

I meant "WHAT DOESN'T KILL MAKE US FOREIGNS" !!

In this point of my timeline Kaneda is nor dead nor alive: nobody knows what has become !!!

NOW IS JUST "CONFORTABLY NUMB": he doesn't feel nor pain nor the love of Benten.

here you are what I mean with that phrase: NOBODY CAN UNDERSTAND HIS LANGUAGE OR HIS FEELINGS !!!


You should read "LIVING IN A BOX" to know the sequel of the love story between Benten and Kaneda (but take a look also at "hate me, eat me": there is an important.... "revelation").

PS: I'm really glad that you like my tales !!

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Thanks Ill try to get to it reading those other ones

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Re: LIFE (TO BREATH THE STARS)
« Reply #13 on: February 27, 2012, 12:15:42 AM »
Passion take the form: cannot hold her, just let explode !!  :hehe


PLIN PLON: TIME IS OVER, THE PREVIEW HAS BEEN REMOVED !!

Don't worry, now you can read the WHOLE OFFICIAL TALE  :mrgreen:
« Last Edit: April 09, 2012, 11:38:10 PM by GiovaneDinamitardo »

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Re: LIFE (TO BREATH THE STARS)
« Reply #14 on: April 09, 2012, 11:41:37 PM »
LIFE (TO BREATH THE STARS)

Enjoy it  :hehe













The rest will come soon  8)
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