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Author Topic: URUSEI YATSURA, A NEW BEGINNING FROM THE END !!  (Read 88720 times)

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Re: URUSEI YATSURA, A NEW BEGINNING FROM THE END !!
« Reply #60 on: February 16, 2008, 12:55:41 AM »
man, this fanfiction is suberb! i got hooked to the computer reading this, and trying to imagine the characters reaction and such, this is the best i ever read!

congratulations! :D
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Re: URUSEI YATSURA, A NEW BEGINNING FROM THE END !!
« Reply #61 on: February 16, 2008, 01:28:05 PM »
I'm so embarassed  :@

Thank you, thank you  _/-\o_ _/-\o_

Prepare yourself, the next chapter is coming soon: "WHEN TOMORROW COMES" !!!

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Re: URUSEI YATSURA, A NEW BEGINNING FROM THE END !!
« Reply #62 on: February 16, 2008, 01:46:46 PM »
In what chapter will you end?
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Re: URUSEI YATSURA, A NEW BEGINNING FROM THE END !!
« Reply #63 on: February 16, 2008, 03:23:53 PM »
I will end with the 22th chapter: " A NEW BEGINNING".

... but, after that, (if you like and if you havn't get bored of me  ;) ), I will move into the room who is dedicate to the fanficions.

I've got much more ideas about Lam� and Ataru...
« Last Edit: January 25, 2009, 02:13:26 PM by Lum-chan »

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Re: URUSEI YATSURA, A NEW BEGINNING FROM THE END !!
« Reply #64 on: February 16, 2008, 04:17:00 PM »
Carry on... Regardless (jk).
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Re: URUSEI YATSURA, A NEW BEGINNING FROM THE END !!
« Reply #65 on: February 16, 2008, 04:44:24 PM »
I will end with the 22th chapter: " A NEW BEGINNING".

... but, after that, (if you like and if you havn't get bored of me  ;) ), I will move into the room who is dedicate to the fanficions.

I've got much more ideas about Lam� and Ataru...
22 chapters !? Holy cow ! what kind of author are you? that inhuman man,you badass
« Last Edit: January 25, 2009, 02:13:51 PM by Lum-chan »
"darling, you give too much thought to what is real and what is not, to what is true and what is false. I realize that is your way, but just this once, accept things as they are. Forego your control, your discipline. and take me with you.

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Re: URUSEI YATSURA, A NEW BEGINNING FROM THE END !!
« Reply #66 on: February 16, 2008, 05:15:26 PM »
URUSEI YATSURA, A NEW BEGINNING FROM THE END

Chapter TWENTY ONE: WHEN TOMORROW COMES

Uru Planet, 165 days after the accident

Now Ataru was laying on a bed.
He was unconcious but, sometimes had momentary laps of reason: during this moments he could see the shadows of someone who was near him and listen their voices, who sounded so far, so he wasn't able to recognize who was talking.

[---] He's getting conscious ?
[---] No.
...
...
[---] With this one all the scars will disappear.
...
...
[---] I heard his scream in my mind !!!
[---] I too
[---] Maybe he became an esper ?
...
...
[---] No, he's still unconscious: you've to wait.
...
...
[---] 'Dear mummy, dear daddy, please forgive me for all the pains that I've caused in my whole life....'
[---] So it was true: he thought to the suicide.
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...
[---] We have to think to something for him......
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...
[---] Are you crazy?
[---] The consequences would be imprevedibles.
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...
[---] I don't mind of you at all: I WILL DO !!!
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...
[---] All right: it will be so dangerous but I think that this is the right thing to do
[---] I'm sure that he'll like it so much
[---] Well, I think it would be impossible that he won't like 'this'.
...
...
In the end be came (slowly) back to normal: he was still laying in a bed, immobilized, and someone was approaching to him.

[Ataru, groaming] Where I am?
[Benten, with sweet voice] Thank you Ataru [and gave him a kiss on the mouth]

Ataru was shocked !!! Since ever, all the times he tried only to touch her gently he got a lots of socks and kicks !!! What was happening ??

[Oyuky, with sweet voice] Congratulations Ataru [and gave him a kiss on the mouth]

Even Oyuky !! Ataru was feeling so confused but so happy at the same time !!!

[Ran, with sweet voice] Thank you 'darling' [and gave him a kiss on the mouth]

'All right: I'm dead !!! Sure, I'm dead !!! I'm in heaven !!! ' was his tought.

[Shinobu, with sweet voice] Thank you for all you did, Ataru [and gave him a kiss on the mouth]

'Oh my God: Shinobu !!! I've forgotten the taste of your kisses since longime.....' was his tought.

[Ryonosuke, rather suspicious] Oh........well........al l right: thank you Ataru [and gave him a kiss on the mouth]

'Even Ryonosuke ?!? I cannot beelive !!!' was now his tought.

[Sakura, with sweet voice] Congratulations Ataru: you're simply the best [and gave him a kiss on the mouth]

'Sakura................how long I've dreamt this moment !!!' Was his thought.

Now all the girls was so close to him, all around his bed.

[Ataru, even shocked, still immobilized] You all....please.........pl ease....... say to me...... you're angels, isn't it ? Because I'm dead, this is true. You're the reward that God gave to me !!! Please, thanks God for me: I ever dreamt to have an harem, now my dream came true !!!

All the girls giggled so much.

[Ataru, now worried] WAIT !! WAIT FOR A MOMENT !!! WHERE IS Lamú ?!? I CANNOT STAY IN HEAVEN WITHOUT HER !!! WHY SHE ISN'T HERE ?!? AN HAREM WITHOUT A QUEEN ISN'T A PERFECT HAREM !!! AND SHE MUST BE THE QUEEN OF MY HAREM !!! WHERE IS SHE ?!? TAKE ME GOD, TAKE ME GOD: I'VE GOT TO TALK WITH HIM !!!!

[Sakura, with genlte voice] Ataru, be quiet: first one, you're still alive !!!
[Ataru, wondering] Really ?!? But.......... BUT YOU WILL BE MY HAREM TOO ?!?
[Shinobu, giggling] He's unforgivable !!!
[Sakura, with gentle voice] No, you wont' have any harem: those that we did was our best way to say 'thank you' to you.
[Ataru, wondering] Really ?!? For what ?
[Benten, with gentle voice] FOR HAVING RESCUED Lamú !!!
[Ataru, surprised, with large eyes opened] WHAT ?!? WHAT ARE YOU SAYING ?!?
[Benten, with gentle voice] Lamú NOW IS AWAKE !!! SHE'S ALIVE AND IS WAITING FOR YOU SINCE LONGTIME !!!
[Ataru, much more surprised, smiling] REALLY ?!? HOW IS SHE ??!
[Oyuky, with gentle voice] SHE CAMES WONDERFUL AS USUAL !!!
[Ataru, shaking heavly the bed, screaming] SET ME FREE !!! SET ME FREE !!! SET ME FREEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE !!!
[Sakura, worried] RAN, OYUKY: GET OUT FROM THE TRAJECTORY !!!
[Benten, worried] RYONOSUKE, SHINOBU: HOLD THE BED STRICTLY !!!
[Sakura, worried] OK, ARE YOU READY ?!? ON MY 'THREE' I'LL SET HIM FREE: ONE..............TWO.... ......

At the 'three' Ataru did a great jump: one second after was smeared on the wall in front of him. But he didn't care about any pain at all and started to run on the corridor, destroying any obsacles who met on his path and stopped only in front of the door of the bedroom of Lamú. All the others was running behind him.
Ataru trembled a little, then opened the door slowly.
Lamú was set on her bed, with her parents side by side.

[Lamú, with sweet voice, shimmering eyes and a large smile] Darling !!!!!!!
[Ataru, screaming, with some tears] LAMUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU UUUUUU' !!!

He jumped over her but the first reaction was totally unexpected: she gave him a great, heavy and loud slap !

[Lamú, with angry voice] THIS ONE FOR THOSE WHO YOU'VE DID BEFORE.........
[Ataru, surprised]..........Lamú.......... ... are  you still angry with me ?!?
[Lamú, now with sweet voice, grabbing him, with eyes half closed] .... AND THIS ONE FOR THOSE WHO YOU'VE DID AFTER !! [and gave him a long, long kiss on the mouth]
[Everyone] WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO OOOOW !!!!

Now he knews that she really had forgived him and was thinking: 'Lamú.........your lips...............so soft.............so wonderful.............YO U'RE THE BEST KISSER !!! NOW I KNOW: YOU'RE REALLY THE BEST KISSER !!!!!!
But, suddenly, he swathed her on the bedsheet, took her on his arms and begun to run on the corridor of the UFO: when was in front a window he smashed with a kick and, holding Lamú with an arms on a side and biting the bedsheet on the other side, he started to climb the structure.

[Lamú, giggling] Darling..........where are you carrying me ?!?

Now he was climbing the high antenna who was over the UFO.
When he reached the top if it throw away the bedsheet and, holding Lamú on his arms, started to lift her up over his head, for several times, screaming.

[Ataru, screaming with all of his strengt] YATAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA AAAAA !!!!!
YATAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA AAAA !!!!!
YATAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA AAAA !!!!!
GOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOA AAAL !!!!!
GOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOA AAAL !!!!!
THAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA ANKS !!!!!!
THAKS GOD !!!! THAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA AAAAAAAAAAAAAANKS !!!!!!

In the garden, watching the scene, all the people was cheerings them.

[L.father, flying around them] Son-in-law, you've did really a great work. But........please....... say to me: do you know also the way to come down from here ?!?

Now Ataru realized where he was and begun to feel a great vertigo.

[Ataru, worried] ......Oh my God..........PUT ME DOWN !!!!!
[Lamú, with gentle voice] Daddy, please, could you help him ??
[L.Father, with  gentle voice] Sure !!! And you, can you fly ??
[Lamú, same voice] Yes !!! As usual !!!

So, holding Ataru side by side, they landed slowly.
But when they were to the ground again, he felt down.

[Lamú, worried, shaking him] Darling !!! Darling !!! How are you ?!? How are you ?!?
[Sakura, with a little giggle] Don't worry, Lamú: this time he's simply having a natural sleep.
[Lamú, surprised] Really ?!? Why ?!?
[Sakura, with serious voice] He was always on your side, day by day. For a lots of night he didn't slept at all, was even caring you and, most of times, all alone, suffering but forgetting all the pains. I really think he deserved a good sleep.
[Lamú, so touched, holding him on her arms] Darling.......... [and huged him]
...
...
In the night, Ataru and Lamú, hidden somewhere in the near wood, laying side by syde, were sharing kisses and tenderness.

[Ataru, with gentle voice, playing with the long hairs of Lamú] You just can't concive how much I love your green long hairs...
[Lamú, with gentle voice, passing one hand among them] Do you really like them so much ?!? You've never sayed to me...
[Ataru, same voice] I really think that you cannot exist without your green long hairs !!! I have a  cushion full of your oldest one.
[Lamú, surprised] Really ?!? And how you feel when you sleep over it ??
[Ataru, same voice] Well........it's strange..............it's so rough........
[Lamú, with fake angry voice] You cunt [and gave him a nip]
[Ataru, giggling] ...AHI !!!!......[now with gentle voice again] I coulndn't live without having you: in this way I've got the illusion that you were still with me.........but........I couldn't live only with an illusion: I needed you !!!
[Lamú, with sweet voice] I feel you so changed !!!
[Ataru, serious] I've been through hell, I've run every red light on memory lane, I've seen desperation explode into flames .....and I don't wanna see it again......and.......do you want to know ?!? If you have to stay into the deepest hell and you don't change your mind is because you're damned to stay there for all the eternity. But......over all........I coulndn't leave you all alone in hell.
[Lamú, same voice] I love you so much.........
[Ataru, wondering] But you, what did you've feeled during all of this time?
[Lamú, wondering too] Well.........truthfully. ....not so much........pain, first of all.......then.......aft er sometimes.......I remember..........heat.. ............a stinging noise.........some people around me (but I didn't know whom)...... then pain again..........and so on........in the end i was feeling so much pain.....I was really scared to die but, suddenly, I've heard your voice inside of me !! It was like a windblast that wipe out the fog !! So, after sometimes, I've opened my eyes......... my parents were there.........we've cried so much......the others too......... and you know the rest !!!
[Ataru, with gentle voice] The doctor saied to me that it was a real miracle: about his own opinion, all of your brain thrombosis were broken up in the same moment, so your head could cames back to normal (and you with him) !!
[Lamú, with sweet voice].........darling........ ....
[Ataru] ......what ?!?
[Lamú, rather ashamed] Wh......why you're undressing me ?!?
[Ataru]......eh ?!?.....ehm........it's the rehabilitation, of course !!!
[Lamú, with sweet voice] Oh........really ?!?
[Ataru, with sweet voice] Yeah: I've got to do the final test !! I must know if your body can feel all sort of stimulation. Do you know a better way than this ?!?
[Lamú, with sweet voice]........daaaaarling..... .....
....
....
....
[Lamú, huged to Ataru, with gentle voice] You were wonderfull !!!
[Ataru, huged to Lamú, breathing loudly, with gentle voice] You.......you're simply the best !!! ..... I......I've to know all about you !!!
[Lamú, same voice] ....about ?!?
[Ataru, even breathing loudly, same voice] ....about........everyth ing: your three measures, for instance....
[Lamú, giggling] You're perverted as usual....
[Ataru, same voice]...... the deseases that you've got....your hobbies.......your dreams......your wishes.......your hope........ and, first of all, your birthday !!! I've to know the date of your birthday !!!
[Lamú, with gentle voice] My birthday ?!? It's the day after tomorrow !!!
[Ataru, surprised] REALLY ?!?
[Lamú, same voice] Yes. My parents are prepearing a great party !!
[Ataru, with clear voice]......th.....thanks God.......I've not missed it !!! That's wonderfull !!! I want to make to you some surprises !!!
[Lamú, excited] Really ?!? What kind of surprises ?!?
[Ataru, giggling] eh eh, if I say to you what I want to do they won't be surprises anymore.....
[Lamú, with gentle voice] So..... this isn't the end ?!?
[Ataru, giggling] eh eh, I've just begun........[and started to caress her]
[Lamú, surprised].......ehm.........darli ng..........wh.......wha t do you mean ?!? You.......you will not......
[Ataru, with fake serioius voice] I am Ataru The Great, the best lover of all the whole universe and I was starving of you since longtime. This night you are like a fruit................the fruit of sin and passion !! And this night was made only for us !!!
[Lamú, sweetly] .....oh my God.............daaarlin g...............yes..... ...I want you........I want you too.....


(TO BE CONTINUED)
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Re: URUSEI YATSURA, A NEW BEGINNING FROM THE END !!
« Reply #67 on: February 16, 2008, 07:11:54 PM »
magnum opus
"darling, you give too much thought to what is real and what is not, to what is true and what is false. I realize that is your way, but just this once, accept things as they are. Forego your control, your discipline. and take me with you.

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Re: URUSEI YATSURA, A NEW BEGINNING FROM THE END !!
« Reply #68 on: February 17, 2008, 12:54:43 AM »
amazing!
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Re: URUSEI YATSURA, A NEW BEGINNING FROM THE END !!
« Reply #69 on: February 17, 2008, 01:39:10 PM »
22 short chapters like these isn't really very long. Put them into something like Word, and how many pages do you have?
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Re: URUSEI YATSURA, A NEW BEGINNING FROM THE END !!
« Reply #70 on: February 17, 2008, 05:35:18 PM »
this is enough to make one very good OVA. ;)
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Re: URUSEI YATSURA, A NEW BEGINNING FROM THE END !!
« Reply #71 on: February 17, 2008, 05:37:38 PM »
actually i think it would be a good movie, just need to go more indepth into some scenes
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Re: URUSEI YATSURA, A NEW BEGINNING FROM THE END !!
« Reply #72 on: February 17, 2008, 06:22:11 PM »
agreed, especially the lum - ataru ones :P
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Re: URUSEI YATSURA, A NEW BEGINNING FROM THE END !!
« Reply #73 on: February 17, 2008, 11:27:36 PM »
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22 short chapters like these isn't really very long. Put them into something like Word, and how many pages do you have?

About 120 pages, I havn't finished the last chapter (but is coming soon: "A NEW BEGINNING")

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this is enough to make one very good OVA.
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actually i think it would be a good movie, just need to go more indepth into some scenes

An OVA or a film is beyond our possibility.

.... but maybe we could realize a very good COMICS !!!

Anyone of you is able to design ?!? Or to use a graphic editor ?!?
We could catch some images from all the urusei yatsura's material and edit on our own, to design the history.

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just need to go more indepth into some scenes

agreed, especially the lum - ataru ones

... ehm ... the soul of Ataru is over us ?!?  ;D
Let me guess: you want to "go more indepth" about some scenes of chapter 3 and 21 ??  ::)

Well, sincerely, I wanted too but I've tried to avoid the hentai scenes.

Maybe this was an error ?!?  ;D ;D

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Re: URUSEI YATSURA, A NEW BEGINNING FROM THE END !!
« Reply #74 on: February 17, 2008, 11:52:28 PM »
If it avoids to be like Lupin the III, so ok.
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